Tuesday 2 June 2015

the exploding planet

Jessica S

my plan
setting: on an exploding planet.
characters: aliens, me, gray, sponge-bob.
problem: planet exploding.
solution: help them stop from stopping the planet exploding.

WALT 1: introduce the characters and setting well my story introduces a problem which is resolved in some way.

WALT 2:  write a few grammatically correct sentences.                                                                                                              

paragraph 1 - hopping into the space rocket

“Well lets just get into the space rocket now” said gray, so gray, sponge-bob and me went into the space rocket. we sat on the seats, the space rocket started “(AHHHHH!)” sponge-bob was screaming so loud he blocked my ear drums, and we are all happy because…

paragraph 2 - landed on the planet
“Where at the planet!!”
Put then gray said “is this the right planet?”
“Yer the commander said go to a exposed planet, and were at the planet.”
We hopped out of the rocket ship, there was laver spitting everywhere sponge-bob asked “why are they singing and not doing anything”. So i asked them “why are singing and not doing anything?” The little tiny alien said “because our planet is exploding everywhere and we cant do anything.”

paragraph 3 - sorting out the problem

Gary came and said “well we can help you from your planet exploding everywhere,” the leader came in and said “how are you going to help us” “well” said sponge-bob i can use my sponge body and sit in the laver from going everywhere great idea sponge-bob. so sponge-bob did that and he stopped the laver, then gray said to everyone hopped into the rocket ship and stay there until we're finished all the aliens said OK and they hopped into the rocket ship.

paragraph 4 - fixing the problem

sponge-bob was still sitting on the laver singing (because the song that the aliens were singing got stuck into his head) me and gray got our tools and made concrete and put it on top of the laver we finished  doing that and made some buildings for them to live in.

paragraph 5 - finished planet

me and sponge-bob got all the aliens and said “ come out and see your planet” so all the aliens came out and saw there planet and said thank you very much and then me sponge-bob and gray went back into the rocket ship went back to earth.                                   

                                 THE END!!!!!!





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